Heavenly Earthly Bodies

I think I failed miserably at rhyming this time, so it is not quite a pantun. And quatrains remind me of Nostradamus. But here goes, the prompt and the poem.

Today, I challenge you to write a pantun. Not a pantoum — though they are related. The pantun is a traditional Malay form, a style of which was later adapted into French and then English as the pantoum. A pantun consists of rhymed quatrains (abab), with 8-12 syllables per line. The first two lines of each quatrain aren’t meant to have a formal, logical link to the second two lines, although the two halves of each quatrain are supposed to have an imaginative or imagistic connection.

Heavenly Earthly Bodies

The wind was whipping at my face.
I slowly turned towards the ocean waves.
Sweet mother how I miss hearing your voice.
I need a long distance plan to fulfill my dreams.

I gaze unto the starry night above.
Contemplating the sparks of light in darkness.
Distant sons yet unborn reach out to me.
Whenever will I settle down into sweet monotony?

The sunset is so brave to disappear.
Sunset an ancient exercise in beauty.
As I reach my third life’s decade,
I witness my dad’s unstoppable age.

 

 
© 2013 D.L. Lang

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D.L. Lang
D.L. Lang
D.L. Lang of Vallejo, CA is the author of five full length poetry collections, including 2016's Poet Loiterer which Kirkus Reviews described as containing "Free-spirited ideals couched in fairly infectious rhymes." She also released her debut spoken word album entitled Happy Accidents.
Lang won Best of Show in Poetry in 2015, and Reserve Best of Show in 2016 at the Solano County Fair. Lang performs at poetry open mics around the Bay Area, including regularly at the Hub as a part of Poetry by the Bay, and was also a featured act at the inaugural Vallejo Man March.